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Once,
in what was perhaps the most difficult time of my life,
I, who never dream,
dreamed so vividly and inescapably.
Wrapped in my cloak
rowed from shore
through moonlit winter sea
ever deeper into trust.
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I think you should be happy with the ending here: ‘ever deeper into trust’. Good, I think, that shift from the dream-specifics of the cloak and the boat and the sea to the more amorphous, abstract term of ‘trust’ — made all the more ‘trusting’ because of the stark, lonely and elemental nature of the voyage, which you capture in just a few brushstrokes.
Comment by The Solitary Walker February 7, 2012 @ 6:37 pmSW gave you the technical…I’ll just say..I like!! I really like!!
Comment by karin February 8, 2012 @ 12:59 amthanks both!
Andy
Comment by pilgrimpace February 8, 2012 @ 1:39 pm